# Pastebin y3Opui4h 11:34 AM <%red3> Alright, so let's begin with our initial opinions on this article. 11:34 AM sorry I have to pop away and eat lunch, I only got halfway through it 11:34 AM <+cybersqyd> it's very stylish 11:35 AM <%red3> This entire article feels very rushed and unpolished. The sentences are dense beyond comprehension, the descriptions are vague and confusing, and I didn't understand what was even happening half of the time. 11:35 AM I agree wih sqyd, very stylish although i was a tiny bit confused about Operator but im guessing that the entity that is Operator is meant to be Hytoth related, yes? 11:36 AM ⇐ Popsioak quit (uid397494@frozen.garden) Quit: Connection closed for inactivity 11:37 AM <%red3> Operator is a very confusing character to me. I'm guessing that they're meant to be one of the antagonists on the story, the ones that were destroying the planets. And in the ending, I believe they change their form to something else? It might just be a different entity entirely. 11:38 AM <+cybersqyd> yeah, operator changes form a few times, i think 11:39 AM red3: i thought i was going crazy when you put it in words about this article's confusion. Like i thought something completely different going on 11:39 AM From what I read, I definitely agree with that. It was a hard read because a lot of the details just felt confusing and unfinished, like there needs to be something to tie it off, but it isn't there 11:39 AM Confusing is a very good way to describe this 11:39 AM <+cybersqyd> yeah the continuity in this series is....weird 11:40 AM <+cybersqyd> i think Nat was trying to play into xer style of having like, weird confusing prose a lot here 11:40 AM <+cybersqyd> and i don't think it quite landed right? 11:40 AM <+cybersqyd> it feels like this really needed a part one to establish stuff better 11:40 AM <%red3> I'm finding it difficult to figure out how I feel about this just because of how... unwieldable this entire thing is. There are legitimately sentences where four actions take place, which only allows for one or two words per action before moving onto the next event. That's nowhere near enough time for the reader to digest everything. 11:41 AM <+cybersqyd> I...like it 11:42 AM <+cybersqyd> it's hard to explain why but i think it's hitting the place where the style makes up for the substance 11:44 AM <%red3> cybersqyd: In all honesty, I don't see a lot of their style in this. Yeah, there's hints of Nat's trademark purple prose, but it's buried in all of this manic writing. The only bits of style that I could grasp came from the cliche one-liners that were slightly rewritten in a way that somehow manages to make them work less. "Deer in the headlights of a truck" is one example that comes to mind, but there are others I 11:44 AM <%red3> found while reading this. 11:44 AM Hmmm its hard for me to say. On one hand i like this for its style, on thr other hand it was very confusing for me to read. 11:44 AM <+cybersqyd> I mean, when I say I like the style, I mean that the manic writing on some level vibes with me 11:45 AM <%red3> How so? 11:45 AM <+cybersqyd> I think it does a good job of conveying the chaos; but really it's not anything deeper than 'i liked this' 11:45 AM <+cybersqyd> like, i don't think it's necessarily good and i get why folk don't like it but it clicks for me 11:46 AM <%red3> I guess I can see that. There are some more surrealist elements in here that I could vibe with, but I just can't get past the prose. It doesn't matter how good the style is if I can't understand the writing enough to see the style. 11:47 AM <+cybersqyd> yeah i can see that 11:50 AM <%red3> I can say that I liked the dialogue in this one a lot more than the previous articles. The generic action/sci-fi movie lines are replaced with more realistic dialogue. The biggest problem I can see with it now is that it kind of goes in the opposite direction? In the earlier tales, it felt like the lines were very expository and using the action-movieness to hide that from the reader. But now, it seems like the lines 11:50 AM <%red3> don't deliver enough information for me to understand. Like when N.J. is talking to the Ortothan alien for the first time. When they said "Lie or accuracy" I couldn't tell whether they meant to lie to the alien or believe that the alien was lying. The dialogue gives too much style and not enough substance. 11:52 AM <%red3> Are there any other thoughts on this article or should we move into our final opinions? 11:53 AM I don't really have much to say. I'm going to have to novote cause this confusion is leaving me very... confused. It perhaps serves a purpose if I finish reading the seires and I decide to go for a re-read 11:54 AM <%red3> This is going to be a hard downvote from me, since I just can't understand what's happening at all. I've already stated most of my reasons why. 11:55 AM <+cybersqyd> i'm...no voting. as much as i like the style, the lack of substance is...eh