# Pastebin jeEXaTHq 3:14:55 PM just asking if it matters here 3:15:02 PM → TheRedBaron joined (Mibbit@SCP-o28s1e.snantx.sbcglobal.net) 3:15:14 PM here we go 3:16:11 PM If I’m not mistaken 3:16:17 PM I read this yesterday 3:16:31 PM anyone wanna crit my proposal and see what I can change or fix? https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-14223924/ghost-division#post-5105592 3:17:13 PM <%Mooagain> TheRedBaron why would you want to write about Nazis? 3:17:31 PM → amby joined (ambylastna@SCP-7sqe53.0pq0.27oa.23c5.2a00.IP) 3:17:45 PM how do I respond to this... 3:17:49 PM Idk 3:17:55 PM seems like more of history 3:17:58 PM ⇐ amby quit (ambylastna@SCP-7sqe53.0pq0.27oa.23c5.2a00.IP) so long suckers! i rev up my motorcylce and create a huge cloud of smoke. when the cloud dissipates im lying completely dead on the pavement 3:18:00 PM and less of horror to me 3:18:05 PM exactely 3:18:14 PM grammarnt 3:18:21 PM anyway 3:18:31 PM → amby joined (ambylastna@SCP-7sqe53.0pq0.27oa.23c5.2a00.IP) 3:18:39 PM <%DrFullham> SCP is in no way limited to horror themes. 3:18:52 PM Just saying 3:18:54 PM its less about Nazis and more of how 1935-1945 Germany is the perfect breeding ground for stuff like this 3:18:59 PM ima continue reading now 3:19:05 PM Gosh is it just me or have a lot of people been writing about Nazis lately 3:19:26 PM <%Mooagain> DrSoulDen glad I'm not the only one that noticed 3:19:46 PM it wouldn't make sense as Romans, or Americans. There is just something different about 1940's Germany that was so desperate for victory, no matter what 3:19:53 PM TheRedBaron 3:20:04 PM Best guess is that spooky month is bringing out the inner historians in some people and the inner Neo Nazi in others 3:20:05 PM Aolsen4 Your idea can be interesting but I feel like you can easily fall into the trap of over-describing the paintings effects so it just becomes something akin to gore porn, even if it isn't your intent. 3:20:11 PM Sadly it’s kinda hard to tell 3:20:31 PM I definitely agree http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/a-olsen this is a link to the sandbox article itself. I think it is INCREDIBLY important to not let it become goreporn 3:20:35 PM TheRedBaron “ but their consciousness remains, forever loyal to a collective consciousness that the troops answer to on their own will” what does this mean 3:20:47 PM Thank you for the feedback 3:20:48 PM → Kignak and BoogeyMobile23 joined ⇐ kignak quit 3:21:27 PM sorry, I sometimes repeat phrases by accident 3:22:33 PM should be fixed now 3:22:34 PM DrSoulDen being a history nerd, the nazi regime is and the global conflict surrounding it is incredibly interesting. I have no sympathy for nazi's but an objective interest in knowing history to its fullest. I think that's why so many people enjoy writing about it 3:22:51 PM I butchered that first sentence, I hope you still understand the meaning 3:22:52 PM Maybe 3:22:56 PM May I ask why you chose AuSchweitz? 3:23:00 PM But it’s kinda weird that uh 3:23:07 PM It’s gotten an uptick recently 3:23:10 PM TheRedBaron 3:23:12 PM ⇐ Slendercreppy0 quit (thelounge@SCP-hmq2mk.bredband.tele2.se) The Lounge - By https://thelounge.chat 3:23:23 PM Like in the past week or 2 we’ve seen a few Nazi articles and that ain’t normal 3:23:51 PM I chose it for the reason that it was 3 in one, making it the largest one. If its the largest, unlimited test subjects. 3:23:59 PM Well, the correlation could indeed be spooky month. Or maybe it is due to the rise of neo nazism on a global scale, anyways thats politics, and not for this channel :) Feel free to dm me if you wish to discuss the topic further 3:24:01 PM Ight bet, I cut it down to exactly 400 words. Hope that improves things https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-14221581/seeking-greenlight-scp-x-aka-memory-leaks#post-5103973 3:24:20 PM → Slendercreppy0 joined (thelounge@SCP-hmq2mk.bredband.tele2.se) 3:24:29 PM Ok 3:24:53 PM ⇐ Edna_Granbo quit (uid369931@goblin.graphics) Connection closed for inactivity 3:25:20 PM So If I’m correct 3:25:36 PM its a liquid/serum that grants immortality 3:25:51 PM but turn the consumer into a braindead zombie? 3:25:57 PM TheRedBaron 3:26:13 PM Not braindead 3:26:21 PM ? 3:26:25 PM thats to "normal" 3:26:26 PM go on 3:26:35 PM so just to a zombie? 3:28:17 PM https://lounge.bluesoul.net/uploads/8578bcd75e077bdf/A743DEAF-D0C3-4309-9F82-86E6012B610F.jpeg 3:28:35 PM central narrative: yours seems like a description 3:28:52 PM But I guess that the backstory part is good 3:29:48 PM TheRedBaron 3:30:09 PM how can I make it noot a description 3:30:14 PM *not 3:30:15 PM Hmmm 3:30:43 PM Try reading my entry, thats a central narrative without it being an actual description. Albeit I am currently rewriting the entry as to not be so... stump. 3:30:48 PM What damage can it cause? 3:30:51 PM ye 3:30:54 PM Central Narrative: Reportings of strange things happening to a BDSM community in 1990'ies Sweden. Family members found in beds with their eyes missing. Pets found with incision scars and missing limbs. All of these related to a group of people who have found pleasure in the deviant acts of sexuality. The VHS comes into Foundation property, and 3:30:54 PM testing is begun, what follows, might disturb you. 3:31:03 PM Why is it anomalous? 3:31:36 PM Maybe something exciting 3:31:37 PM <%Mooagain> Aolsen4 please don't paste large chunks of text here, just use the idea forum or sandbox 3:31:40 PM "What makes it anomalous" 3:31:42 PM → Cerastes joined (uid393798@SCP-v1h1d0.lymington.irccloud.com) 3:31:45 PM like a containment breach 3:31:47 PM i know 3:31:55 PM Mooagain Gotcha. 3:31:57 PM POV: me 3:32:06 PM 🤓 3:32:14 PM <%Mooagain> containment breaches are fairly overdone as far as plot devices go 3:32:18 PM But anyways 3:32:20 PM ye 3:32:25 PM im just out of ideas 3:32:29 PM idk 3:32:32 PM ask itachi 3:32:36 PM he seems professional 3:32:41 PM When pushing for a strong narrative, any writers tips as to facilitate these into an SCP article? 3:32:43 PM im just a guy who reads scp 3:33:18 PM That collective consciousness is more than a bonding of mind 3:33:36 PM I felt like your sandbox almost went too adult, with extraneous details like him unbuttoning himself and moaning. SCPs tend to be more clinical in detail, at least in my reading experience. Aolsen4 3:34:16 PM It is actually a different consciousness, a completely separate one. 3:34:44 PM Kignak Thank you a lot for the feedback. I am happy you have read it, and I will try to rewrite that part. Actually I am strongly considering to leave out any sexual material, as it is putting the wrong narrative into question. 3:35:09 PM @Slendercreppy0 3:35:12 PM TheRedBaron 3:35:15 PM Ohh 3:35:17 PM you go first 3:35:25 PM This is an unwilling act, btw. Hence one of its anomalous powers. But it can be redone in a more... tasteful way 3:36:10 PM so that collective consciousness is an actual entity 3:36:36 PM You talking to me? 3:36:40 PM somehow, someway, the serum allowed them to talk to them. 3:36:43 PM yes 3:36:43 PM That one moment when someone asks you to expand on central narrative but you're at word limit ;_; 3:36:52 PM Oi 3:36:53 PM f 3:37:04 PM I was just about to ask you about that 3:37:12 PM anyway 3:37:17 PM Ye? 3:37:19 PM < 3:37:22 PM <%DrFullham> MrItachi: Replies to other peoples' comments do not have a word limit. 3:37:26 PM > 3:37:49 PM <%DrFullham> If someone has asked you to expand on something, just answer that in a response to their comment, rather than editing the original post to include more information. 3:38:19 PM → EzekielJK joined (EzekielJK@SCP-gq1.huv.184.199.IP) 3:38:23 PM ahhhh okkkkk 3:38:38 PM the serum allowed them to talk to that entity somehow, and it favored them. It is a powerful entity, and allows their vehicles to function without fuel 3:38:59 PM ammo is never lacking, too 3:39:14 PM So in simpler terms 3:39:27 PM immortal overpowered nazis? 3:39:39 PM entity likes serum doods, gives them fuel and ammo 3:39:45 PM nothing else 3:39:48 PM ⇐ EzekielJK quit (EzekielJK@SCP-gq1.huv.184.199.IP) The Lounge - By https://thelounge.chat 3:39:58 PM Ok 3:40:10 PM I understand 3:40:18 PM but somewhat still very confusing 3:40:24 PM plus, the soldiers are not immortal, gas gets them every time 3:40:31 PM Ye 3:40:34 PM ooh 3:40:44 PM thats why you added the gas thing 3:40:46 PM good 3:40:48 PM yes 3:40:49 PM nevermind 3:40:56 PM all my questions are answered 3:41:06 PM I don’t think I can give greenlight 3:41:12 PM But I do like your idea 3:41:26 PM just be more cautious in the future 3:41:37 PM of what exactly? 3:41:41 PM a lot of misspelling in your thread 3:41:47 PM yeah 3:41:56 PM I proofread when I can 3:42:03 PM <%Mooagain> TheRedBaron why do you want to write about Nazis instead of any other historical military? 3:42:38 PM Mooagain not many other millitaries had the desperation of the Nazis in the later stages of WWII 3:42:57 PM <%Mooagain> I find that hard to believe 3:43:18 PM <%Mooagain> Any military that was close to defeat likely had the same feelings 3:43:40 PM who would be desperate enough to build massive tanks to end the russians? Who flew jets in WWII? 3:43:46 PM idk, I think nazis are way overdone is stories 3:43:53 PM The Nazis 3:44:06 PM Sorry 3:44:15 PM why not instead of Nazis, do Imperial Germany under Kaiser Wilhelm II? 3:44:17 PM went grabbing an ice cream sandwich 3:44:21 PM what did I miss 3:44:29 PM tech wasn't as advanced yet 3:45:09 PM but they still, had tanks, and planes, and different vehicles 3:45:10 PM plus, Imperial Germany was not as crazy as Hitler. 3:45:11 PM <%Mooagain> I'm getting the feeling that you don't have any interest in portraying the nazis in a way that represents the atrocities they committed on the world 3:45:26 PM I’m not as experienced at giving critiques but does what he chose really matter 3:45:38 PM Like what if wrong if he chooses Nazis 3:45:42 PM it could be random 3:45:46 PM asking for me 3:46:08 PM Does It matter* 3:46:11 PM Its not that I am glorifying Nazis 3:47:14 PM Wow 3:47:17 PM such silence 3:47:27 PM If you look at the bigger picture of the narrative, its that Hitler was losing, 3:47:48 PM <%Mooagain> Slendercreppy0 try to keep down the random chatter, this channel is for criticism only 3:47:54 PM he wanted immortal troops to push the Russians back 3:48:33 PM <%Mooagain> Again, this could be literally any army that was about to lose a major war 3:48:44 PM The way I see it, you chose the Nazis because it’s the most shocking/gets the biggest knee jerk reaction from people. 3:48:58 PM You could easily slot in the Soviets into the slot and nothing would change 3:49:01 PM developed a serum by testing on POW's and Innocents in those camps 3:49:37 PM So it's basically a captain america story? Like a super soldier serum? 3:49:44 PM no 3:50:01 PM Super Soldier serum gone wrong? 3:50:20 PM Not wrong, more of "wait boss it aint ready yet" 3:50:29 PM and Hitler not giving a dang 3:50:47 PM bit 3:51:17 PM So is this SCP supposed to be scary or something? 3:51:57 PM <%Mooagain> TheRedBaron you have yet to give a reason as to why this can't be any other country in any other time 3:52:07 PM And from the sounds of it if it was something created by humans then it sounds more like an explained SCP than anything 3:52:31 PM ⇐ Kignak quit (thelounge@SCP-i186gj.north-slope.org) The Lounge - By https://thelounge.chat 3:52:33 PM This could might aswell be an addition to SCP 2430 and Stalin could be the BBG 3:53:24 PM Mooagain Desperation 3:53:48 PM Any army can be desperate 3:53:48 PM Well, a lot of war chiefs during the ages were desperate to win a battle, or a war 3:53:52 PM Why the Nazis specifically 3:53:57 PM yeah but other countries were desperate as well 3:54:11 PM I think Petain was pretty desperate 3:54:22 PM Is it due to your own general knowledge, and perhaps, fascination of WW2 that this subject is more fun to write about? 3:54:43 PM (Also there is nothing wrong with being fascinated about WW2, I am a history enthusiast myself) 3:55:28 PM If the Americans, Brits, Soviets, even French were to do this, it wouldn't make as sense. Germany was willing to throw everything they got. 3:55:45 PM Guys 3:55:47 PM i gtg 3:55:48 PM The Soviets? Oh boy, you should read more up on the Soviets 3:55:52 PM Cya 3:56:03 PM The Soviets also had that 3:56:08 PM TheRedBaron good luck, I really like your thread 3:56:10 PM ⇐ Slendercreppy0 quit (thelounge@SCP-hmq2mk.bredband.tele2.se) The Lounge - By https://thelounge.chat 3:56:19 PM that "Run at the enemy, not die" mentality 3:56:26 PM https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-2430 This is a soviet experiment 3:56:34 PM Dude, Germany was *this* close to capturing Moscow 3:56:35 PM <%Mooagain> TheRedBaron again, desperation is not a thing that only Nazis can have 3:56:37 PM Damn bruh your thread being doused and lit on fire 3:56:46 PM If anyone would be desperate, it would be the soviets 3:57:09 PM Also the Soviets were notoriously famous for not giving a rats ass about their subjects lives. Less so than the Germans 3:57:27 PM here, have this vid by the Armchair Historian for context https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V07ZBBO6Ls0&t=658s 3:57:51 PM Seeking greenlights is tougher than I thought, I thought it was only the core concept we had to do, not the entire article 4:00:39 PM "The grinding days of 1943-1945 were a delusional period for Germany. A heady cocktail of crushing reality stirred with ideological blindness 4:00:43 PM → MartyK-1 joined (thelounge@SCP-h0j.iff.146.140.IP) 4:01:22 PM Looking for more review of my idea article. Has been edited within the past 30 minutes. 4:01:22 PM https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-14214404/seeking-greenlight-mount-penglai-and-the-eight-immortals#post-5099094 4:01:40 PM steering an intoxicated Nazi leadership towards ever more extreme measures in their bid for ultimate victory." 4:01:56 PM but like other countries can also do that 4:02:14 PM I think you're focusing more on why germany than on why can't it be any other country 4:03:00 PM Also I'm dropping this down again cause I'm on fall break and have nothing else to do https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/forum/t-14221581/seeking-greenlight-scp-x-aka-memory-leaks#post-5105817 4:03:14 PM then what do you think, how could it be the soviets 4:03:37 PM it seems to me like you are trying to find an excuse of why it cannot be germany 4:05:02 PM MrItachi So in simple, it's a computer program which functions inside human brains? 4:05:14 PM oml, it doesn't have to be the soviets, or the germans, or ethiopia, its just that desperation isn't enough to justify the creation of the serum