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The mask itself is consistent with the Manta brand of sleep masks produced between the years of 200█ and 201█.
-> I don't understand why you have to redact the years here. It's just unnecessary.

However, the mask itself lacks manufacturer markings of any kind that would link the company to its production.
-> However, the mask lacks manufacturer markings.

When worn, the wearer is transported to a corridor consisting of various doors on either side stretching on beyond the subject’s range of vision. 
-> The wearer is transported to a corridor stretching beyond the subject's range of visions, with doors lining its walls.

Various tests on the length of the hallway have proven inconclusive, as the amount of doorways and the physical length of the corridor seem to change depending on the amount of experiences the subject once had memory of. 

-> Various tests indicate that the amount of doorways and the physical length of the corridor change depending on the subject.

Attempts to determine the location of the corridor via GPS tracking of subjects has proven ineffective, leading to the hypothesis that the corridor may exist in its own separate reality.
-> GPS tracking of subjects is ineffective, signifying that the corridor is in a separate reality.

Upon entry into the corridor, subjects report a state of tranquility and curiosity in regards to their location that compels the subject to navigate the corridor. 
-> Cut the 'upon entry into the corridor'
-> Subjects report tranquility and increased curiosity inside the corridor, pushing them to navigate it.

After approximately three minutes of exploration, subjects will attempt to open one of the many doors on either side of the hallway. 
-> After three minutes, they will attempt to open one of the doors.

Upon entry, subjects report to observe a third person perspective scene of an event within their past, with a majority of these scenes prompting a positive response from subjects1. 
-> Remove 'upon entry'

 Two minutes after the scene concludes, subjects report observing vocalizations (hereby designated SCP-XXXX-1) originating from an indeterminate distance from them. Said vocalizations range in language, tone, octave, and accent, with the only consistency being the conversations SCP-XXXX-1 partakes in with the subject.
-> Cut this whole paragraph. The experiment logs will tell us what actually happens.

If the subject has a positive reaction to the observed scene, SCP-XXXX-1 will comment in a positive manner in regards to the scene, often expressing positive remarks about the subject’s actions or emotional state during the scene in question. Should the subject react to the scene in a negative manner, SCP-XXXX-1 will converse with the subject in an empathetic manner similar to that of psychiatric therapists or counselors, often consoling the subject if the scene evokes a negative emotional response. In all cases, the subject reports a more positive outlook on their lives or events in the past, often remarking that SCP-XXXX-1 shares similarities with immediate family members, or other significant individuals within the subject’s social environment.
-> Destroy this whole paragraph too. Once again, the experimental log covers for this.


SCP-XXXX was discovered by foundation field agents on 5/7/202█ ...
-> Put this in an addendum specifically for discovery.

amnestetic treatment, experimentation utilizing such subjects is prohibited by unanimous vote of the 05 Council (see Experiment II for details).
-> amnestic treatment, experimentation is unanimously prohibited by the O5 Council.

D-9341 is a 30-year old caucasian male previously known as Pvt. Benjamin O. Walker. D-9341 has a history of Post Traumatic Stress Disorder related nightmares following his discharge from the United States Marine Corps after [DATA EXPUNGED]
-> caucasian should be 'Caucasian'
-> I don't get why you should write in an expungement, or why its supposed to be there. You can simply refer to the incident D-9341 found himself in by names like 'The Carolingian Submarine Incident'. That way, we get worldbuilding.

, and an audio headset for communication with Dr. █████ at command.
-> god the black boxes look painful. There's no sense in redacting the doctor's name

SCP-XXXX-1: The fault does not lie with you, Benjamin.

D-9341 is observed turning to his right, then left before standing still once again, as if confused.

D-9341: Who said that?!

SCP-XXXX-1: Worry not…I wish no harm to befall you Benjamin. I regret that you had to endure such hardship once again.

D-9341 is silent for a few seconds.

D-9341: You were my brother…

SCP-XXXX-1: Indeed I was, yet I blame you not for the outcome of that day. Therefore, why should you blame yourself?

D-9341: Our position was compromised…we should have been more careful…maybe then you wouldn’t have had to die…
-> SCP-XXXX-1's dialogue is really stiff and emotionless. Have them become more relaxed and casual, especially since D-9341 refers to them as his brother.

SCP-XXXX-1: It is acceptable to cry, Benjamin. I forgave you long ago…it is time that you forgive yourself.
-> No one talks like this... i dont remember anyone saying 'acceptable' in my whole life

D-7545 is a 28-year old native american female previously known as Amelia S. Bennet.
-> Native American female previously known as...


The two figures in site security attire escort the D-Class personnel into the containment chamber of SCP-████, where [DATA EXPUNGED]

[DATA EXPUNGED]

[DATA EXPUNGED]

-> You don't have to repeat [DATA EXPUNGED] two more times

Notes: It has been determined via authority of the O5 council that any and all personnel that have previously underwent amnestetic treatment must not interact with SCP-XXXX until further notice. Disruption class has been updated from Dark to Vlam following this experiment due to the potential breach of secrecy the anomaly presents. Investigation into the potential for SCP-XXXX to manipulate and/or tamper with observational equipment via anomalous means is currently in progress. Furthermore, the proposition to utilize SCP-XXXX in the containment of memetic anomalies impairing the memory of site personnel is currently under discussion.
-> This is especially hard to read. Trim or cut some sentences here

D-8675 is a 41-year old caucasian male previously known as Edgar A. Maxwell.
-> Caucasian male