# Pastebin I94SdWy3 12:03 PM Alright, then let's start with our initial impressions of the article. 12:04 PM I think this is a nice and different contrast to the previous articles that we have so far seen 12:05 PM I am not a huge fan of the Factory GoI format tbh, but the footnotes are a great addition to this piece. 12:05 PM Well, what can I say about that? It's Night who go sign a contract with the Factory. But it's well-written enough to be an enjoyable read. Plus, the contrast between what Night said and what is written in the Format is pretty funny. 12:05 PM (and for that, yeah, thanks to the footnotes) 12:06 PM Like, we have Night who is like "I will never sign that with my blood, damnit!" and in the article, it's like "Oh, you know, it's something who is totally minor, not important at all". 12:06 PM The actual detail for Chicago spirit inclusion was really nice in my eyes too 12:06 PM Stuff like "downsizing in 1933, following the departure of the founder," 12:06 PM I'm not sure if this is the case in other articles in the Factory format, but I enjoyed how the mechanical clinks and clanks are changed into dialogue, which gives it that memetic feel that allows it to feel a lot more mysterious. 12:08 PM ⇐ Greyve quit (uid436902@synIRC-AE113E32.stonehaven.irccloud.com) Quit: Connection closed for inactivity 12:08 PM Ah, yes, this Investor! Pretty interesting to imagine its reactions, what it is, things like that. 12:09 PM Honestly, I love how this is such a neat concept. Stormbreath took this format and went "How bizarre can I make this simple and boring concept?" and I do love it. The Investor is an interesting character of mysteriousness. Like, even the Factory documents record its voice in the gear speech 12:11 PM I wonder if they had a memo for understanding what it try to say. xD 12:12 PM I do feel like the narrative itself is pretty boring, in all honesty. It recounts information that we've already heard about in earlier tales and all it really shows is Mr. Night wanting to create the Chicago Spectre and then not wanting to work with the Factory. This has too little to say in such as a format, and while I do like the mysteriousness, it fell away very quickly once I realized what was going on, and there 12:12 PM was little else to sustain me through the tale. 12:15 PM Hmmm, to me I thought this provided a different thing that we were used to seeing in the other articles 12:18 PM Well yes, this article has at least some semblance of mystery while the others don't, but even that doesn't last for very long, and certainly doesn't bring me through the rest of the story. 12:22 PM I guess I can concede that this doesn't spark much but I do like how the author used the format to tell the story they wanted to do 12:25 PM I can agree with that, somewhat. 12:26 PM Does anyone have any other thoughts on this article before we go into our final thoughts? 12:27 PM I guess the Pros is that the format and story is different from what we usually see. Cons are that it is relaying info that we already know and doesn't have much going on, is that what we saying? 12:29 PM Hey, guys, sorry to leave you now, but I will go. Was fun, will probably read tomorrow other "Black As Night" Tales, kisses on your cheeks and happy Pride Month! 12:29 PM I guess so. I definitely feel this series is suffering due to both a lack of actual action and the insistence on using GoI formats which restrict the emotional storytelling of the series. 12:30 PM ⇐ Pighead quit (hullo@im.actually.not.a.sole.head) Quit: CGI:IRC 12:34 PM The Factory GoI format feels very restrictive in that way. 12:34 PM I would say that it's a bit more lenient on storytelling than other GoI formats because it does allow for direct dialogue, but I can see that. 12:35 PM It's format is so rigid it is hard to tell a narrative that isn't very blocky imo 12:36 PM Isn't that true in some ways with all formats, though? 12:38 PM Not sure to the same extent